Claim: Hunting is important in the life of this group of people.
Supporting Fact: The deer is placed on the hood of the truck, above the heads of the people
Claim: The boy is trying to be tough like the man, however the boy is also shamed of the hunting.
Supporting Fact: The man and the boy are both holding an object that could be used as a weapon, however the boy is separated, and is better dressed, than the man.
Claim: The man and women are not married.
Supporting fact: The women is not wearing a wedding ring.
Three characters appear in “Young Life” by Bo Bartlett: a man, a woman, and a boy. The boy does not want to be completely similar to the man. In order to look tough, like the man, the boy, facing away from the man and woman, is holding the stick as if it were a club. Also, similar impermeable expressions display on the faces of the two male figures. Beyond the impermeable expression and bearing of a weapon no other similarities appear. The child’s preppy upper class garb- collared shirt with a red pullover sweater- greatly contrasts the man’s blue collar garb- a gray t-shirt, oversized jacket, and a brightly orange baseball cap. The separation and clothing of the boy show how different he is to the man.
Nice job making and supporting your claims. For grammar, remember that when you use "however" between two independent clauses, use a semicolon instead of a comma.
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